2011年5月25日 星期三
Expressing an Opinion - 1
In my opinion, it good for students to wear uniform when they are going to school. There are some following reasons for which I support that. At the first, if every student wears uniform, it will be looked more neat when they enter the school, instead of a mess. Besides, it will be more easy to identify which school the student belongs to. Otherwise, maybe there will be a bad guy who wants to sneak into the school or acts as a member of the school. Then do some bad things to abash the order of the school. Finally, the students don't need to think about what they should wear the next day. That is to say, if the school asks them to wear uniforms, then they don't have to worry about the clothes which they will dress on repeatedly. For the points above, I think wear uniform is still a good thing for student to prevent themslves from some problems.
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it good for (it's)
回覆刪除more neat (neater)
more easy (easier)
themslves (themselves)
At the first是不是可以不用the?
回覆刪除instead of a mess前面可不用逗號唷!
轉折詞用得很好!
uniform是不可數嗎0.0?
回覆刪除At the first, 要the嘛?
For the points above, I think wear uniform~ wear+ing
*第一行it's good,我覺得寫when they go to school 就好了,不用用進行式。
回覆刪除*第二行是first of all/ first、neater、我覺得insead of 前不用加"," 用instead時才要加。
*第四行,easier
*Otherwise, maybe there will be a bad guy who wants to sneak into the school or acts as a member of the school "to" do some bad things to abash the order of the school.這兩句可以變成一句就好了,去.Then改成to。
*倒數第二行wear→wearing
wear uniform 改 wearing uniform
回覆刪除附加論點寫得很好喔~
it good for students 要有動詞
回覆刪除At the first不用有the吧..
1)At first不用the哦
回覆刪除2)it's good for
3)more neat改成neater
4)more easy改成easier