2011年3月2日 星期三
Being a volunteer
I once lived in Taipei and I worked as a volunteer in a hospital. It really felt good to get the opportunities to help people. One morning an elderly woman was closed to me and began to talk to me. She said that she had stayed in the hospital for six months because of a car accident. Therefore, her legs were broken and she had to do rehabilitation of her legs every three hours a day. From then on, I would go to see her and company with her when I had free time. I would help her do the rehabilitations and keep her from being hurt. With the time we got together longer, we knew each other much more. But I had never seen her family, she told me that her husband died five years ago and her daughter was married and lived in USA . From her expression when she was talking about her daughter, I could feel that she was lonely. Two months later, her daughter came to the hospital with her husband children for picking her back home. I saw the elderly woman’s face appear happiness. I think nothing is more important than family, owning family is the most happiest thing!
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1. I once lived in Taipei, and worked as a volunteer in a hospital.
回覆刪除(and 前面的","要省略,要不然要在and後方再加主詞I。)
2.It really felt good to get the opportunities to help people. (主詞應該是"I"吧!)
3.Two months later, her daughter came to the hospital with her husband children for picking her back home.(應改為husband "and" children)
4. ~, owning family is the most happiest thing!(要改成owing to 喲!)
以上是孟孟給你的建議 ^_^
1.From then on, I would go to see her and company with her when I had free time. 那個company前面是不是要加keep或be?
回覆刪除2.I saw the elderly woman's face appear happiness.那個appear在saw後面所以要不要加ing還是加ed??
上面的好討厭一次給四個害我都快給不建議了:((
第五行不用every吧!
回覆刪除第五行可以改成I began to see~~用would好像有點怪怪的!!
USA前面要加the
1.One morning後面不用逗號嗎?
回覆刪除2.in USA 要加 the
3.From her expression when she was talking about her daughter, I could feel that she was lonely. 改成
I could feel that she was lonely from her expression when she was talking about her daughter.會不會比較順~
From then on, I would go to see her其中的would感覺怪怪的不然就when I had free time那個when改if比較通順一點
回覆刪除大概就這樣吧~~~啦啦啦
沒有什麼問題...
回覆刪除I could feel that she was lonely, from her expression when she was talking about her daughter逗號去掉比較好或者可以改寫
USA前要加the
回覆刪除owning family is~應該是owning to